Instructions

Writing Descriptions

Emotive description

1. Read the following description of a chair

    “What a pleasure it is for me, on coming home after a hard day’s work, to see my chair near the window, inviting me to a few minutes’ repose. It isn’t a new chair; I’ve had it for many years; one of its arms has cracked a little, and the paint has long since worn off the parts where I rest my elbows and scrape my shoes, but nevertheless it is an old friend whom I am always glad to see again and into whose arms I trust myself with thankfulness and pleasure.”

(Anon.)

Below are pictures of six chairs. Which one do you think the narrator is talking about?

When you have made a decision, click on the ‘compare’ button to see if we have come to the same conclusion - and for the same reasons.

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b

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It was a bit difficult to decide which chair the narrator was talking about because it was an ‘emotive’ description. The narrator was telling us how he ‘felt’ about the chair. We had to use a bit of deduction to work out, rightly or wrongly, the chair in question.

When writing descriptions to be used in instructions, we need to better describe the object in an informative and/or technical way.

Informative / technical description

When writing an informative or technical description we need to use a more structured approach. We discussed the use of the passive form before in ‘Report Writing’. The passive form now shows itself again.

Note the use of the passive in this description of a can opener.

    The simplist type of can opener consists of a handle, a crosspiece and a short sharp curved knife blade. The opener is made of mild steel. The blade is mounted on the handle, while the crosspiece is above and behind the tip of the blade. The crosspiece is used to support the handle when the blade is lifted up to cut a can. The handle acts as a lever, while the crosspiece acts as a fulcrum.

Do you agree that this is a good description of the can opener?
Maybe you can make a better description?

Exercise

In the following exercise you will be presented with three pieces of text, each describing a familiar object. Read the text carefully and try to decide what the object is.

Be warned! Although the texts describe familiar objects, it might take a little while ‘before the penny drops!’